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Model UN Paper - John Tuttle - 10-28-2008 09:24 AM

Hey, can any of you read this paper for grammitical errors and such?


Re: Model UN Paper - John Tuttle - 10-28-2008 12:09 PM

anyone?


Re: Model UN Paper - Fire Elf - 10-28-2008 12:20 PM

first, it's caucas, not caucus, second off, belarus is not a caucas nation.

The rest i'm not gonna bother with for now.


Re: Model UN Paper - magikarp - 10-28-2008 01:50 PM

Quote:The Republic of Belarus takes the security of the world and creating peace among all countries very seriously; and is willing to work with the other countries of the UNSC to address the problems of terrorism, nuclear proliferation, and the security of Eastern Europe.
You don't need a semicolon there because the part after the first "and" is a dependent clause. You could also keep the semicolon and change it to something like "therefore, it is willing...."

Quote:...involving one of those three topics.
I think "involving any of these three issues." sounds better, but what you wrote isn't wrong. ("Any" includes actions that involve more than one issue, and "issues" seems more related to actual actions than "topics" does.)

Quote:Currently the world is an unstable place, but the key to fixing it does not lie in military action, but in diplomacy.
"Currently the world is an unstable place, but the key to fixing it lies in diplomacy rather than military action." sounds better to me because it puts more emphasis on diplomacy.

Too tired for moar.


Re: Model UN Paper - John Tuttle - 10-29-2008 06:14 AM

Thanks guys for the changes.