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Can Someone Review my Poem?
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Illuzion Offline
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Can Someone Review my Poem?

It's a free verse that took me over an hour to write. I'm quite proud, but my mom says it's inappropriate so I turned to the internet to make the final decision if I should tweak it or not.
Fucking Ducks am I Right?
Sometime when I step on a duck (quack)
I just want to say fuck
Because it made me trip and fall
And then I broke through a wall
I was in a very strange land
Of people wearing nothing but a rubber band
And then I woke up from the dream
To find things aren't as they seem
A reindeer prancing on my bed
And a little mouse riding on a moped
Then I said:
AHHHHHHHHHH GAWWWWD I'VE LOST MY FUUUUUCKING MIIIND

It could use some small changes I'm sure.

Have your regrets, but always stay strong from yours truly, Illuzion.
05-02-2014 08:04 AM
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Can Someone Review my Poem?

Is this for school? and if it is what class?

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"The difference between school and life? In school, you're taught a lesson and then given a test. In life, you're given a test that teaches a lesson."-Tom Bodett

"I've been making a list of the things they don't teach you at school. They don't teach you how to love somebody. They don't teach you how to be famous. They don't teach you how to be rich or how to be poor. They don't teach you how to walk away from someone you don't love any longer. They don't teach you how to know what's going on in someone else's mind. They don't teach you what to say to someone who's dying. They don't teach you anything worth knowing."-Neil Gaimen

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05-02-2014 08:05 AM
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Illuzion Offline
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(05-02-2014 08:05 AM)Lollipopgirl Wrote:  Is this for school? and if it is what class?
It's for my favourite teacher in Math c:

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05-02-2014 08:06 AM
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(05-02-2014 08:06 AM)Illuzion Wrote:  
(05-02-2014 08:05 AM)Lollipopgirl Wrote:  Is this for school? and if it is what class?
It's for my favourite teacher in Math c:

Ah ok.

RIP URY AND GWEDIN
"The difference between school and life? In school, you're taught a lesson and then given a test. In life, you're given a test that teaches a lesson."-Tom Bodett

"I've been making a list of the things they don't teach you at school. They don't teach you how to love somebody. They don't teach you how to be famous. They don't teach you how to be rich or how to be poor. They don't teach you how to walk away from someone you don't love any longer. They don't teach you how to know what's going on in someone else's mind. They don't teach you what to say to someone who's dying. They don't teach you anything worth knowing."-Neil Gaimen

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05-02-2014 08:07 AM
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Can Someone Review my Poem?

If you write an emotionally-charged poem that isn't "inappropriate" in someone's eyes, chances are you're not doing it right. This is an excellent piece of free verse; my only complaint is that it isn't longer. It gets my seal of approval.

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05-02-2014 08:08 AM
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Can Someone Review my Poem?

For the end you could write I've lost my head to make it rhyme.

RIP URY AND GWEDIN
"The difference between school and life? In school, you're taught a lesson and then given a test. In life, you're given a test that teaches a lesson."-Tom Bodett

"I've been making a list of the things they don't teach you at school. They don't teach you how to love somebody. They don't teach you how to be famous. They don't teach you how to be rich or how to be poor. They don't teach you how to walk away from someone you don't love any longer. They don't teach you how to know what's going on in someone else's mind. They don't teach you what to say to someone who's dying. They don't teach you anything worth knowing."-Neil Gaimen

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05-02-2014 08:09 AM
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RE: Can Someone Review my Poem?

(05-02-2014 08:08 AM)DoA Wrote:  If you write an emotionally-charged poem that isn't "inappropriate" in someone's eyes, chances are you're not doing it right. This is an excellent piece of free verse; my only complaint is that it isn't longer. It gets my seal of approval.
Ha ha, if you haven't guess (which you obviously have) it's a joke and I'm writing a poem write now for the memory box about personal things.

Have your regrets, but always stay strong from yours truly, Illuzion.
05-02-2014 08:11 AM
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I know it's a joke, but if it were serious it wouldn't be that bad.

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05-02-2014 08:20 AM
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This is one of the few poems I actually like.

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05-04-2014 01:07 PM
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RE: Can Someone Review my Poem?

^ Same.

If this is one of those poems that you dramatically act out, you should totally post it on YouTube and let us see! (Even if you just make it so only people who click on the link can see it.)

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05-05-2014 04:23 PM
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